Finished Film

First Draft:


First Draft Critique:
Our first draft proved that we needed to improve the production company logo and also add further graphics that would introduce the actors, musicians, directors and editors. We also aim to refilm certain shots such as the scene when Chris is receiving a phone call from his Mum because that is what the podcast suggested was necessary to improve our opening sequence. We will need to film the rest of the content shown in our storyboard so that we can complete our final edit. Also an issue was the sound of the wind and the waves coming in loud in certain shots and quite in others. To improve this would aid the continuity shots and enable the film to flow more effectively.

Second Draft:


Second Draft Critique:

Our second draft differs dramatically from our first as we had to change actors and also re-filmed many scenes. Also we added our new production company logo and title scene which our Media class seemed to like. The proxemics of the new scenes were also congratulated as it helped show the narrative and the purpose of Chris#2's character. A massive issue that arose was when Chris picks up the phone twice which we didn't notice as we had got so used to seeing the scenes. The group critique has definitely helped us to see what we need to do to improve and we now endeavor to carry out our peers' suggestions.

Finished Film


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